Monsters
As Sarah gets up to stretch, she realizes she is no longer in her room but in a cave filled with dangerous looking monsters. She looked around for an opening but there wasn't a strand of light to be seen. With freedom in her mind she finds light,all the way the other side of the enormous cave. Slowly, slowly she starts to make her way to the door. But then she was shocked to see, one of the gigantic monsters waking up. She runs for her live and is free from the giant beasts. Sarah woke up sweating and panting thank god it had only been a dream.
I don't think you need to say slowly twice in a row. And I didn't see the prompt when I read it.
ReplyDeleteI thought there "wasn't a strand of light to be seen" im really confused
ReplyDeleteBe sure to read over your story out loud to a peer or an adult to check that it makes sense and for fluency. I agree with some of your peers feedback that there are some sentences that are confusing. For example, "She looked around for an opening but there wasn't a strand of light to be seen. With freedom in her mind she finds light..." I thought that there wasn't light but now there is.
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