Tuesday 12 January 2016

100 WC Week#2

Individual Picture

To be honest with you I have never had a good school picture, and this year wasn't different. As I joined the queue, I had felt the urge to sneeze but it went away. We parted into different lines and I get a lazy photographer, great! There is only one person ahead of me and they are going up now. After what seemed like an eternity, it's my turn.
 I sit down and the photographer says, "Say cheese!"
 Right before I say cheese, I let a big sneeze and the photographer got my sneeze face. Of course, the photographer didn't let me do a re-take.
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6 comments:

  1. Tigger13 January 2016 at 10:03

    I like your story but maybe you can a bit more details and use a thesaurus but overall I like it

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  2. Unknown13 January 2016 at 21:17

    your story is good. And I like how you used different sentence starters. But maybe you should`ve used some powerful words. But other than that, I liked your story.

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  3. Unknown13 January 2016 at 21:17

    your story is good. And I like how you used different sentence starters. But maybe you should`ve used some powerful words. But other than that, I liked your story.

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  4. Unknown15 January 2016 at 08:35

    I really like your story, I can relate! You could use different sentence starters, instead of The or We. Other than that, your story is really good!

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  5. Unknown16 January 2016 at 11:32

    A very creative idea for your story this week. I agree that you could use more powerful language. For example, instead of …photographer got my sneeze…could you replace got with a better work?

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  6. Kate18 January 2016 at 04:34

    I really enjoyed your story Mr Einstein- your introductory sentence really grabbed my attention.
    Perhaps you could use commas to make some longer sentences for your next story. What happened with your previous photos?

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